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Fleurs aux paumes

Publié : dim. 17 mars, 2024 5:04 pm
par Carambole-de-mai
Fleurs aux paumes
Ouvertes aux ciels
Qui offrent leurs ombres
En camaïeu de miel

Je navigue entre
Coeur et ficelle
Sur l'émotion d'un ange
Qui déplisse mes ailes

J'ai ce coeur transi
De peurs et d'amour
Me laissant vivre ainsi
Entre confiance et détours

Fleurs aux paumes
Ouvertes aux ciels
Une pause comme
Un élan sur un fil

Re: Fleurs aux paumes

Publié : ven. 19 avr., 2024 12:19 pm
par KushnomGhatak
In this evocative poem, the speaker paints a picture of vulnerability and emotional exploration. The imagery of "Fleurs aux paumes" (flowers in palms) suggests openness and receptivity, while "Ouvertes aux ciels" (open to the skies) conveys a sense of yearning and connection to something greater.

The contrast between "coeur et ficelle" (heart and string) highlights the delicate balance between emotions and control. The "émotion d'un ange" (emotion of an angel) represents the purity and transformative power of feeling, while "déplisse mes ailes" (unfolds my wings) speaks to liberation and self-discovery.

The speaker's "coeur transi" (stricken heart) reveals a depth of emotion, encompassing both "peurs et d'amour" (fears and love). This duality reflects the complexities of human experience, the coexistence of vulnerability and strength.

The final lines, "Fleurs aux paumes / Ouvertes aux ciels / Une pause comme / Un élan sur un fil" (Flowers in palms / Open to the skies / A pause like / A surge on a wire), reinforce the poem's central themes. The flowers and open skies represent openness and receptivity, while the pause and surge suggest a delicate balance between moments of stillness and bursts of emotion. The wire imagery adds a touch of tension and risk, hinting at the challenges and triumphs of navigating the landscape of one's emotions.

Overall, the poem captures the essence of emotional vulnerability, the delicate dance between fear and love, and the transformative power of self-discovery. The imagery is vivid and evocative, and the language is concise and impactful.

Re: Fleurs aux paumes

Publié : ven. 19 avr., 2024 5:54 pm
par Carambole-de-mai
Ahaha merci énormément, j'ai ri et en même temps été très sensible à ce commentaire.

Thank you so much, with love. Carambole